She was brought to life on the night of crows
a porcelain monster, is how the story goes.
Eloise, was her name that was told
an evil little devil in angels clothes.
Ten past ten was when it all began
singing out the rituals in lower lands.
Sacrifice another is the gift of life
Eloise would wake from her porcelain vice.
A splatter of blood from a virgins neck
the crows start crowing,from within there nests.
A chapel of horror seen with my very own eyes
when Eloise would start coming back to life.
Blink, blink, blink from her darkened eyes
unholy, unholy, part of the devils device.
Then she screamed to the depth's of my soul
turning her head 360 looking at the crows.
Author notes
Picture inspired credit too:
http://titania86.deviantart.com/art/The-Dark-Half-26330841
I think I should of continued this... But not really sure how long you wanted this.
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Comments
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This is really good, but I want to know what happens next, lol. Great job tho nonetheless. Best of luck
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I'm waiting for the rest of it...
this is definitely dark. right up my alley. perhaps Eloise and I could be friends. because you know I would rather have her on my side than against me. excellent job with this.
the imagery is extremely detailed & quite vivid.
good luck
kat
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I really like this! you did a wonderful job with the prompt! The imagery was so vivid and detailed! I really loved it.. I'm sure that my sister will as well.. Best of luck!
Angel
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Excellent Write
Great imagery...nicely done.
Nevadapoet -
Kick a*#
Great story poem.
Deliciously evil and dark.
Awesome....
wolf
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what an ending..awesome imagery! A great piece, dripping with darkness, has a great sinister feel to it, chilling the spine nicely 
A wicked write, good luck in the contest 
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I liked this a lot. reminded me of the birds Lol great evil piece you hjave here you should be proud of it
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