She struggles so hard to hide the bruises,
Made by he who all accuses,
She lives in fear for her own life,
Living in this endless strife,
He apologises, pleads and kisses,
No matter where he hits, he never misses,
Locked up in this wasted hell,
She becomes once more an empty shell,
She wants to leave but dares not try,
Alas, if she stays, soon she might die,
He must find another soul to abuse,
For he feels powerful when he leaves a bruise,
She tries to make up her panda eyes,
And when he leaves, she gives up and cries,
Her tear-stained face is all to rife,
How many more women must lose a life?
She packs her things and runs away,
And soon she finds a place to stay,
When he realises she’s not coming home,
We know that he’ll not leave it alone,
He will hunt her down and find her there,
And back she will be in this despair,
How many more women will there be
before the world will finally see?
Author notes
My name is Georgia Freya-Dawn Thornton 
I think this piece is a mix of all three, encouraging abused women to run away and seek help, showing people what goes on and showing the women they can leave and they will be better for it if only they can break away, Domestic violence is wrong period.
A contest entry
- ABUSE - looking for poems to be published :) by DramaQueen469.
550 points, ended October 25, 2008, 58 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OCTOBER is Violence Against Women Awareness Month by DragonBlue.
2600 points, ended November 10, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I read this one Hehe. A powerful poem, and well written too! Great grammar.
Take care, keep on writing! I see much potential within you!
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Abuse is non-negotiable.
Domestic violence is only considered a misdemeanor. It does not become a felony until the abuser is charged with domestic violence three different times, and then it is up to the judge to issue the federal warrent. If it were two men, it would be considered assault, even assault with a deadly weapon if the man is trained in any special forces or weaponry. But these same men beat their wives and it is a 'domestic disturbance'. This is why it continues.
Women have been devalued and thought of as property for so long in this world run by men, that the good ole boys are the judges on the bench, looking the other way for crimes committed against us.
I have read that we demonize the abuser as they need help too, if so they need to be confined as the criminally insane, for some will kill the one that gets away if they ever find her again.
Your pen does touch on all three, which gives you extra brownie points with me. Thank you for entering this contest on an inhumane, unacceptable, non-negotiable behavior by men in our society across the globe that violently rape, beat and kill women on a daily basis. It is time for the pain and the violence to stop.
Blessed Be~
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Exceptional
I really like the way this poem makes you feel the emotion in it. You really seem to be able to relate to what a woman might feel if she was abused. I really liked the depth to this it was very dark, but a poem of this nature would be. I really enjoyed reading it because it shows a certain depth of maturity that you have and considering your age you are a lot mature than most people. Yeah I reckon this poem is definitely a winner.
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I am utterly blown away.
By far the most well-crafted and thought-provoking piece I have read in quite a while. WELL DONE and thankyou so much for entering!
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blah i know this story... too well... my first husband has still been stalking me 15 years after i left him. im just glad to b away from him even if it meant losing everything... u have penned this perfectly hon... captured all the emotions. the only reason i escaped is i got new neighbours who reported it when they heard it. u couldnt get closer to the truth than this poem, brilliant,
hugs,
georgie,
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Wonderfully written poem. Powerful and raw emotions throughout this one. And yes, I agree - domestic violence is wrong, way wrong.
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Great write. And i agree with you 100% ,Abuse of any kind is wrong! This peice shows what people go through day after day. good job.
~*Zannah*~
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Im left speechless. This is really heartfelt and dark. I love it. <3
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It such a sad thing, a horrible thing, and yet ... it's everywhere. Domestic Violence is very much so wrong ... there are a lot of us who have gone through it ... You have spoken such strong words in this piece ... and it makes me so sad to read it. But beautiful within it's meaning. You have done a very lovely job expressing this truest and harshest situation. Thank you for letting us read this. Very powerful!
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this is such a powerful write and your words speak so much truth yet it still happens and we can't stop it no matter what. hope your ok
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WOW im soo adding this to my favourite poems,
i love this poem i realte like 100% and i mean honey its so damnn amazing, and your flow is on its top game lately!!all my love,
kitty xxx
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