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Stolen Abyss;

 


Tattered curtains
were never a match
for sunlight.

No matter how far
heads were sunken
into the other side
(the cold side)
of the pillow-
daybreak always
locked eyes shut.

 

and it scared me-

in summer months

when I didn't awake

and catch myself

from falling into

your green abyss.

 

 



 

Author notes

I love waking up
to his green eyes

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  • requiempoet gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    simplicity is the best sometimes isn't it? But the complexity of the situation is what makes the poem have that much more depth. I'm glad you won gold! thank you for the good read.


  • letters to no one
    August 11, 2008

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    Awh I love this,
    as usual.

    Its so simple, but the emotions conveyed within are very complex; love is so deep and difficult.

    No wonder this poem won a Gold, it deserved it

    Shelly
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  • marlene47 silver member
    July 26, 2008

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    Very nice. Lots of images - a window, sunlight through its curtain, searching for the cold side of the pillow, seasons, the green eyes of another. Soft waking emotion too. Congratulations on the gold.
    Marlene

  • aaaaaaaa
    July 25, 2008

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    as usual you just wow me. amazing write again. I love the first stanza and I think it works especially nice with the ending stanza which really wraps the entire poem together nicely.

    the way I saw the poem was that since the curtains were tattered, the sunlight would always peek through, and it would just lure you out into the green world that it has created. I love it!