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When Smoke Gets In Your Eyes

there were slate gray ovens--
quietly heated,
smoke spilling from stacks--
left unheeded;
as intent crept
on leather soles--
deep seeded,
from bunkers it slithered--
then receded;

and the sky turned black--
with objection
sun hanging its head--
in dejection
for the grass still grew green,
blood seeping below--
stains unseen;

hate is a subtle thing,
nailed to crosses--

marking the graves--
of life's losses.

carved into swastikas--

distorted

and then religiously--

contorted,

leaving truth and justice

morally extorted...


 













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  • adsaige
    July 25, 2008

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    Judged

    This prompt was taken in many ways, and I happen to think this is one of the ones that took it's own approach. I am happy to see this entry in the contest, if not just for it's message, and well written verses, but it's phenominal rhyming!


  • Cannonsfire
    July 25, 2008

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    Subtle comes in so many forms, you took it this way and gave us what society explains it to be. Beautifully said.Love, C


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 25, 2008

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    Really amazing. You have dealt with such a somber subject in such a beautiful way. I love the rhyme and intense, short phrasing.

    The title is amazing, for it speaks to the confusion and darkness of hate and war, as well as the self-inflicted blindness that results from the hate. And the smoke and black skies of war is such a brilliant contrast from the beautiful pictures of smoke of the abandoned homes.

    That line about hate being subtle is so telling, and from your examples, you remind us the extent to which hate can lead us.

    Very compelling write.