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Rainy Nights

Lonely days have melted into
Desolate nights
I sit in the dark
Dreaming of you

As the rain touches the window panes
I long to be that rain
Caressing your flesh
Hand to flesh, like water to glass

Author notes

this is sensual at the end. not erotic, hope thats okay. if not I will re write it

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 20, 2008
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    This is longing at it sharpest point. Very beautiful!!!!!!

  • liddybitz
    August 27, 2008
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    I thought it was very well done. Almost like watching a dream.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    oooohhh I love this on so so very much.. you did an outstanding job on this poem.. I love it.. sensual this is most definitely.

    I love you

    mommy


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    August 12, 2008

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    Awesome

    Wow! I absolutely completley understand this poem and it instantly coinjured up a few images in my mind. the 1st image was of 2 lovers embracing each other in a cold dark dreary abandoned barn or building period that looks spooky and any ways well they make love with the rain being their rhythamatic beat and embrace each other through out the cold rainy night and the other image was of a typical Washington State rain storm as it always rains at night in the Fall & Winter though occasionally snows but rarily. any ways this poem by far really hit me hard as it really got my mind gyrating with this comment. excellent work my loving ap girlfriend and keep up the incredible work. , Love Always, Paul =)


  • missrenee
    July 29, 2008
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    your really good :]


  • IntoWildSoul
    July 25, 2008

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    rain on the glass,hand to flesh and lonely nights ,its a good mix to make crazy love on empty beds with bodies without names


  • word20dragon
    July 25, 2008

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    Great Write

    I like this I get images of a girl dreaming of a guy she is in love with he might just like her as a friend or he doesn't even know she's alive. She still dreams of her touching him, and him touching her Her hand slips out of his like water slipping down a glass window pane these are the images I get reading this so GREAT WRITE.


  • None But Nim
    July 24, 2008
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    Yeah, is that a problem?


    • Blooming Poet
      July 24, 2008
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      no just curious. I am bisexual. so I have nothing against lesbians. cause that just wouldn't make sense


  • None But Nim
    July 24, 2008

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    wow!

    This is EXACTLY the type of thing I am looking for! You hit the nail on the head and hit home hard. Thank you for your entry, I wish you the best of luck.

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