honey, darling, baby?
your words, not mine
someday perhaps maybe...
when all the planets combine
you wished, you pleaded
you got...but no longer
i was never what you needed
i am so much stronger
but brat, stay away
you are perhaps spared..
but only for today
i guess im still scared
ive let go..
ive lost my pain
it still hurts though
but im able to gain
so here is my fare well
my final good bye
ill see you in hell
or up in the sky
Author notes
this is a poem i wrote to say good bye to alot of pain ive been dealing with over a certain ordeal best left untold...i wont forget, but i wont hold on.
A contest entry
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I can't help but love the ending! It leaves kind of a positive note ... up in the sky! It made me smile and that's always a good thing. thank you for entering
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I think the best part of this is how you opened it. Great job it's always hard to let go, but sadly you usually have to. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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good
ur a step ahead of me..i cant let go yet -
I love this- and it's ironic you should comment me as I'm listening to Pain by Three Days Grace
. It's very angsty.
"honey, darling, baby?
your words, not mine"
I like how you open this.
"ive let go..
ive lost my pain
it still hurts though
but im able to gain"
Your rhyme scheme is great. I like the message here, how you haven't forgotten, but you're moving past the pain.
Wonderful write. Great job. :]
-Lily♥
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i really love tha last stanza!!! this is a really good poem...i love it!
keep writing
keep smiling
keep the peace!
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