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The path of much dancing

The world is a world, like Mars or Venus,
but the Earth is a lucky rock,
the rock did learn to roll,
and Chuck Berry was...
There fore we are!

Rock and Roll,
not the sacred syllable Om
but on the right track.


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  • nobodys looking
    August 18, 2008
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    First off thank you for your comment on my poem. Now onto your's... I like it. It's light and funny, and just overall well written. I am however a little iffy on the first line, it just seems off because of the repition. But as I dont have a suggestion pretty much just disreguard that and feel secure in a great job.