One single step at a time.
I can feel your eyes crawling
over me. My minds telling me
to picture big wide open spaces
to keep me calm, to keep me from
screaming.
You keep pulling on my skirt and
nodding your head towards the
bed as if its some unspoken code
that i should know of first hand.
Your teeth dripping with the venom
is making me weak in the knees. The
mystery that your eyes are holding
are damn near hypnotyzing my soul.
Its like your pulling my inner-self
free from her hidden shell.
My body is taking on a new attitude
as if your controlling it all with
the flick of your tongue.
Softly but painfull you sink your
teeth into something fresh and
innocent. Sucking me dry but leaving
just enough for me to feel your
poison circling through my veins.
I'm floating on a firey cloud that's
taking me to a place unknown. Sending
my body to a place its never been...
You're ending me piece by piece just
for your personal enjoyment.
You whisper with a smile on your
lips "Thanks For The Ride"
Author notes
i dont know what to make of this...lol i'm in this chiodos mood and everytime i hear them my darkside shows through...i hope this is what you want kinda...idk... eepp
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opt 4.
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Darkened Decadence
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Comments
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wow!! that was amazing. i wish i could write like that. i suck at writing poetry.i really want to learn
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I really like this and I like the snake imagery and all the other imagery in here. This was very well written. Great job and thanks for entering.
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I like the snake imagery throughout, and the unflinching look at the dark side of seduction almost bordering on rape. I felt this was very well written. You know, I didn't even pick up that it was a vampire poem at first. Either way, whether you take the vampire as literal or as a metaphor, this is a powerful piece. Good job and thanks for entering.
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Wow, very deep and interesting. Dark and inviting. Great job.
~Oka/KC -
I like it. great write
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this was a lovely write to read,
i like the imagery and originality in this piece,
it is a very gentle piece to read i love it,
all my love,
kitty xxx -
Whoa! That was great. I loved the ending, it just kind of clicked.
And I love Chiodos
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quite benighted, I really enjoyed it
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Oooooo dark, twisted, I love it. Great job.
~Oka/KC -
AMAZING
I'll bite you!! Especially after that amazingly sexy poem. I love it. Great job. Thank you and good luck.
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