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Trust

I let my hand rest
In the palm of your hand
With complete trust,
You won’t crush the butterfly
That is my free spirit.

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  • azure85 gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    A very nice reflection in the closing lines, that illustrates the complete trust you have in the other person. A lovely tanka, thank you so much.


  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    This is beautiful, I love the metaphor in those last two lines. I had to read this several times through, because the depth it contains is so breathtaking that I wanted to take it in completely. Wonderful, best of luck in the contest!


    • queens1
      August 6, 2008
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      Thank you very much! It is amazing when something I write affects someone else. I am in awe.
      Patty


  • willowprincess
    August 2, 2008

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    beautiful!
    how hard it is to trust someone with yourself.
    but when they help you to fly it's so completely worth it.
    love it.

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