Hurtful Feelings
Taken over
L O V E
You say you
Love me
Yet you show me
H A T E
I sit beside you
You don't notice
But look
me in the
E Y E S
And see my
T
E
A
R
S
you know
I want to
D I E
I take these
p
i
l
l
s
Many at a time
Yet you sit
and watch
like you
Just don't
C
A
R
E
Author notes
What is on your mind? What is going on in your life? Tell me about it.
In a list
A contest entry
- TELL ME ABOUT IT..... by xwarriorXprincessx.
550 points, ended August 4, 2008, 52 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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Oh honey,
What aread this one is! Dark, and yet we see this too often in todays world. I really liked how you set this up! Great job!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I know the anguish of feeling that others that you love aren't loving you the way you need to be shown. However, I also know that it is in their own helplessness they too shut down and go into their own survival mode when they feel nothing they can do will make it better. Doesn't make it right or wrong, but yes harder to overcome what we ourselves are going through. Intense right, and I feel the pain expressed.
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wow.. nicely done sis... I am speechless really .you did great.. good luck1
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This is such a great yet sad piece.
It's a terrible feeling when no one
cares or acknowledges you throughout
your life. Sorry that you are feeling
this way and I hope that your world
will turn around for the better very
soon. Take care and good luck to you
in this contest my friend!
Jeremy0826 -
i understand they watched me take fucking pills, cut and drown myself and didn't give a flying fuck...im sorry you are in this predicament and i wish you the best..i'd put you in my prayers however im not up much for praying lately however you will be in my thoughts..
tc
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You have done a great job. Your poem is very visual. You express yourself very well. I know where you are coming from.
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oh my.
no worries. that's a good oh my. an excellent one, in fact.
i love the artistic quality of this piece. absolutely delish. i love that's it's not just line line line line... you took it to a deeper level, using the poem and letting it emphasize itself. very very very wonderful.
love is my favorite topic to write on be it happy love or the beautiful disaster of its loss. i understand both feelings and what you've said to me here... this goes straight to the heart.
best wishes, dear!
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