braided wood
entangled trellises
one lonely leaf
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Are you watering that plant?
Nice - the trellis as braided wood, entangled and one poor leaf.
marlene
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Pretty!!!
Although...how could a leaf be lonely? I thought haiku were supposed to be literal & w/o personification.
Maybe this is a more modern haiku.
Well, I liked it.
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Have you ever been a leaf?
Huh? They're alive!
How do you know they don't have feelings
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Don't rate this comment please :)
I don't know, I'm just told not to use personification. I fauled the haiku class...4 times
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Actually, lonely doesn't have to be indicating feelings
but maybe just the fact that it is alone.
Definition three at dictionary.com
"3. lone; solitary; without company; companionless."
*Sticks out tongue*
Geeze, Sailor must be rubbing off on me. -
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LMAOLMAO it must be. Damn you Meghan!!
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Are you drunk or is it just me?
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No, I smoke oxygen
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Good answer!
Just eavesdropping here! -
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eaves dropping
snow lined gutters
rotted wood -
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Oh, nice.
The leavings of the eaves!
Believe me I'm not snow-lined, although my wood might be rotting. -
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"The leavings of the eaves"
great title... rolling
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Hahahahaha, well it's thy unholy truth. That's often the best answer.
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