Close your eyes and let the dreaming
Take you where you want to go
Let your hopes become the reason
To heal the pain and tears that flow
Let me serenade your wishes
And let the past inside you go
All those betrayals that once hurt you
I'll be here and you will know
That I believe in you so
You were once someone I thought of
Who could give me all I need
And I became so smitten
Now I'm yours for eternity
Yes I'm yours for eternity
Those yesterdays that once were many
Have become like faded memories
Now we have all our tommorrows
Like an endless summer breeze
And I love to see you smiling
It's like an echo of the moon
Sometimes I see it in your dreaming
That's gone too soon
You were once someone I thought of
Who could give me all I need
And I became so smitten
Now I'm yours for eternity
Yes I'm yours for eternity
So let me serenade your wishes
And let the past inside you go
All those betrayals that once hurt you
I'll be here and you will know
That I believe in you so
Now I'm yours for eternity
Yes I'm yours for eternity
A contest entry
- subtle by adsaige.
300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All-time Best Rhyming Prewrites by TabbyCat.
600 points, ended September 23, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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damn
all this for a 300 point contest?
screw it, I quit u win.
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I think this poem reads like a song,well done.
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Judged
I see the concept that you were going for. There are many strongs parts in here that offer beautiful imagery, and repetition.
Thank you for your entry.
Good Luck! -
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A perfect song to keep the band playing and the dancers dancing while the world spins round them unheeded or is it unneeded? I love your style! joy
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