To lie on the beach in the arms of a lover
And count every star as it shines
A night in her arms with the sky to discover
And read in between all the lines
A kiss on the lips and a hand in your own
The world is all yours but it's only on loan
A walk on the beach arm in arm with a lady
You're watching the moon start to rise
You stop for a kiss where the trees are quite shady
And swim for a year in her eyes
Her arms pull you close so her hands can explore
Your arms wrap her up so your hands can do more
A dip off the beach when the dipping is skinny
And nobody there, just you two
And then you can lie feeling giggly and grinny
And knowing just what you can do
The taste of the salt and the cream she was wearing
A game on the beach is a pleasure worth sharing
Then home from the beach for a bath and some drinking
And a hope that the night doesn't end
A bottle of wine with a chat while I'm thinking
You're more than a lover, my friend
My night was a dream, will it ever come true
Will I play on a beach for an evening with you
A contest entry
- .•¤**¤•. Love .•¤**¤•. by XBeautiful MistakeX.
550 points, ended August 4, 2008, 31 entries
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I love it!!! this is amazing! and you know what? you deserve someone to do this with. best of luck in finding her!! And thank you for entering
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So rewarding is the treasures we share
The love we call that is our own...mac
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Bravo
Ilove the line" A dip off the beach when the dipping is skinny" a very enjoyable read. I'm new here and so many writes are gloom and doom. it's very nice to read otherwise. Thank you, Boog -
well done
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Good stuff.
another fine one
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Beautiful...as always
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Good edit, bro. Kudos.
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Cute... giggly and grinny... pitched entirely à la Jeff Green. I am sad to see that the female rhymes aren't carried through to the last stanza, but overall deffo not bad!
How about:
"Then home from the beach for a bath and some drinking
And a hope that the night doesn't end
A bottle of wine with a chat and some thinking
And more than a lover, a friend"? -
"You stop for a kiss where the trees are quite shady
And swim for a year in her eyes." This was my favorite line. It was very deep, and I am rather impressed.
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