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Soon Absolution, Revival!

 

 

 

 

     You bring laughter

   when the darkness snares.

 

        I'm still

 

 and I hear You

     in the silence.

 

      You are the quiet.

Lord,

         You embody everything,

 

   even nothingness.

 

         

 

         Your intricacies

   bombard and compel;

 

         You bring my mind

       into submission.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cannonsfire gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    Lovely, poignant and powerful. I am just wondering if 'intricaties' should be 'intricacies' as it is one of those words that is hard to pronounce let alone write lol. Fine write here. Love, C


  • adsaige
    July 24, 2008

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    Yes, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I see what you are saying. It has a soft spoken praise and words in it, but not over bearing. Very subtle and enlightning.

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