I stare into the sea of everything that is and to be
I flow my hand through it as if it were nothing at all
funny how it can be there yet
feel like it was never there in the first place
have you ever had a love that felt like it just sorta went away...
a flower bed that died away over time?
...or maybe your child grew up before your eyes
gone away to college and you feel like they were never there?
well as I sit here flowing my hand threw the stream of time
I ponder all these things......
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
credit:Beauty_of_the_Beast_by_vision_of_shadows
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hmm, very ..confused, notice im saying confused not confusing,. it sounds like you didnt figure out what you wanted from life, and that is why when you get some free time off everyday life, you realize you feel empty. im young, but i get that sometimes, my medicine is immediately do something craz, and insane
when me and my bf kinda had a short .. we are gettin colder moment, our friend told us, you gotta make memories thats what we did, and we found out that we are as hot as before. and that we wont ever get cold if we dont give up.
your poem reminded me of that.
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intereresting piece. keep pondering.... some of us have it worse.
hugs,
georgie,
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yes life can be viewed and recapped through the poetic muse as well and this way your thoughtfulness is quite natural and rather very meaningful too..I love the flow and the impact of it..well done...
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Very universal -- all of us have felt this way at one time or another. I like the metaphor of the sea and your hand in its flow. Wonderfully done! Peace.
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you can very much relate to this poem! anyone can! this was very interesting and i enjoyed it!
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wow this was fucking amazing.
you said it crystal clear. you really did.
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Very Nice
I like this a lot. This is one that gets you thinking, in fact re-thinking even. I could read this a few more times, toss it around in my mind for days, & probably be quite inspired by it! Very nice & very deep!
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Some very interesting thoughts in this poem which are relatable experiences. When time passes and events, people and possessions disappear as if they were never there it can make us wonder about the future as well as the past. Very nicely thought out ideas.
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wow. i like the way this captured the moment of time.its really..just wow. good write
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Great take on the prompt, I really enjoyed reading this and it gave me something to ponder.
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This was a really interesting take on the prompt.. I really liked the fact that you thought of the lake as time.. I really liked that.. You did a wonderful job.. I really enjoyed reading this.. Thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck..
Angel
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