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waves roil sandy strand

waves roil sandy strand
retreat reform roil once more
sandpipers saunter

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  • notorious gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    I don't think alliteration is good in haiku...though, I do love alliteration and probably abuse it sometimes in freeverse.

    I do appreciate how everything's in lowercast & punctuation-free.

    "mre"<--I think you meant 'more'

    "sandpipers saunter"
    I like the last line best.

    Good luck