Metallic waste shaped into perfections
this life I will never take for granted
all that I've seen and all that I've heard
were made-up scenes of an act of desperation...
bedraggled misconceptions
that mock away resemblance
now are the shattering resonance
of what scarced beauty used to be...
Blind duality disolved and sealed-
printed lustrous macabre that peels
diminishing recension and recovering
revelations of stage-made façades...
While you take your step onward
stage-fright convulses your name
harassing you to be amok
constraining you to be peripheral
I, transformed into the midst of the flaw
confirming I'm distraught-
Rendered at last I envision the real truth
I will never be good enough for your stage...
Harlequins and jokers are welcome
but I, I am declined; out of line-
I am to be severed, concluded and evaded
because my act lacks of mockery.
Individually circumscribed to compete
my act to you is vacant-
keep searching for my hand
it will not be good enough for you; never-
I'm not good enough for you
~♥~
Author notes
Fot the first time in years I let out what I feel in fine verses without cursing and without mentioning names... All I do for you its just not good enough, I feel distraught and I feel sorry for you, because everytime I try to reach for your hand you let yourself slip away...
XXVampireeyesXX
"Venom of a thousand needles"
A contest entry
- Give me your best! by Priest Winter.
450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 13 entries
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Never Again Will This Hurt Me
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Outstanding wording, images and emotion in this! The depth of pain pierces the reader with its sharp claws of never being good enough.
Excellent!
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Very beautiful! The vocabulary choice mixed with the rhythm makes this piece simply amazing! There's not much more I can really say about it. You have me in awe with this. Wonderful job, my friend!
Blessed be!
~Winter~
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Ohkay, so you should definitely enter this in a contest or something ! Your vocabulary is BEYOND amazing & incredible, and I was left in complete awe after reading the first two lines. You surely have a way with words that is just wow. I don't even know.
-bedraggled misconceptions
that mock away resemblance
now are the shattering resonance
of what scarced beauty used to be...
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As in those lines. Just completely blew me away. They're also very relatable.
-Harlequins and jokers are welcome
but I, I am declined; out of line-
I am to be severed, concluded and evaded
because my act lacks of mockery.
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Wonderful metaphors & imagery. I can't even begin to describe how talented you truly are
Keep it up ! ♥
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WOW this is a beautiful write. The metaphors are amazing, and the way the poems comes out...wow. Great job on this one as well.
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Very beautiful artistry in words just beautiful
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Wow ... I didn't know you had this in you ... but I like it! my favorite lines were also:
"Blind duality disolved and sealed-
printed lustrous macabre that peels
diminishing recension and recovering
revelations of stage-made facades..."
This piece is for sure one of my favorites from you
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This is such powerful emotion and the wording was amazing. My favorite part was:
"Blind duality disolved and sealed-
printed lustrous macabre that peels
diminishing recension and recovering
revelations of stage-made façades..."
I enjoyed the stage as a metaphore as well. I think you are an awesome writer and they keep getting better.
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beautiful poem i loved it. good write
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I relate to this. I'm angry/sad so this is gonna be a shitty comment. Good write. I truly do relate in so many ways.
Tal.
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