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Lover

I left to meet her at the park,

Champagne in my basket, a treat

With plans to moon watch, when it’s dark,

Just then, my heart, it skipped a beat

 .

A door just opened, on a street

It gave me such, an awful fright,

I heard then, in a voice so sweet,

Lover, enter and spend the night 

.

Together, flames we will ignite

In our bed, with sheets of satin

Beside us, candles flicker bright

Enticing our passions within

 .

With strawberries and cream we’ll sin

Champagne from your body I’ll lick

Encased in beauty, that shy grin

As moonlight’s osmic shines magic

 .

I should have met her at the park,

But when, my heart, it skipped a beat

A journey new, I did embark

My lover’s whirlwind swept my feet

.

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The Prompt Coffee House...

Create your own poems with the help of a poetic line borrowed from other poets. Or create your own piece from the images the line puts in your head.

Credit for prompt used to ... Emily Dickinson for her line A door just opened on a street

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  • Sesheta
    July 25, 2008

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    Beautiful poem, artful rhyme, suggestive and sweet and well-written and enticing and mesmerising. I love this! One critique: "Enticing our passions within" breaks the otherwise flawlessly flowing rhyme. I don't know if "enticing within our passions" would mess up the sound of the poem, but it doesn't butcher the words too much for the poem...in my humble opinion. Other than that, thank you so much for this entry!


  • maralisa silver member
    July 24, 2008
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    Champagne in my basket, a treat With plans to moon watch, when it’s dark,Together, flames we will ignite
    In our bed, with sheets of satin Beside us, candles flicker bright Enticing our passions within wow a very beautiful poem with somw fantastic imagery