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under the straw hut

                      under the straw hut
                      lovers waiting for a storm
                      contemplate the moles
                      on one another's shoulders
                      delicate tamari drops

Author notes

background by Pamela A Lamppa

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  • azure85 gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    This is a very beautiful tanka, full of imagery and emotions. So pretty set with the lovely background, thank you so much.


  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    A beautiful tanka, it feels very traditionally Japanese. I easily slip into this scene you've painted, a simple thought and image given so much life. Best of luck in the contest.