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the fake girl...

there's that girl in her own little

world.

you can see there is a mistake because

this girl she is fake.

 

her smile, well lets just say

it don't last for a while..

behind her sealed lips

you can see her sadness and the pain.

her life is like a constant game.

 

think of this girl ..

so sad, so hurt

all alone with no family

no home..

 

as she walks along the path..

 she runs into the road

cries for help then gets hit

and the little fake girl..

well lets just say she is no more..

 

 

 

 

Author notes

If you see someone who looks as though they are in pain and stays alone so much often all they need is someone to say hi some one to recognise they are there it could save their life .

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 13

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    next in poem

    On this one please put into your author notes that if you see someone who looks as though they are in pain and stays alone so much often all they need is someone to say hi some one to recognise they are there it could save their life .


  • xeroabyss II
    August 13

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    Hmmm, such is a true reality of the world sometimes.
    This seems like a conclusion to "Dear Family".


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    February 7

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    her smile, well lets just say

    it don't last for a while..

    behind her sealed lips

    you can see her sadness and the pain.

    her life is like a constant game.

    ^^^^
    I hate that anyone could ever make you feel this way. I hope things brighten up for you. Keep looking up


  • BadazzGangsta
    December 23, 2008
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    awwwwwwwwwww soooooo sad...


  • Avatar of Innocence
    September 7, 2008
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    Thank you very much for being patient with me, and entering my contest.


  • broken-angel
    August 12, 2008
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    love this,...can relate to it in a way...amazing write xx

  • know one
    August 11, 2008

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    cool!

    I liked the progression in this poem,at times I felt the flow was interutped but over all it was great,keep writting and thanks for entering!


  • Devilish Temptation
    August 3, 2008
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    Very beautiful poem sad and intense with the bitter emotions


  • Unknowing...
    July 24, 2008

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    this poem hold so much meaning to me. it shows how i am putting on a fake smile and pretending all is fine even though my wrists are bloody


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 24, 2008
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    Wow this kinda reminds me of me besides i hope i dont get hit :] that might hurt

  • RosePetals
    July 24, 2008

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    wow.
    this was a really good poem.
    it made me want to cry,especially the end.
    i loved it.

    RosePetals♥♥

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