Oppression, depression,
my selfish obsession.
A bottomless pit,
for the living dead.
I lived there many years,
resounding voices in my head.
"Rise up from there!,
I'll show you the way."
"I love you and I care",
this voice would often say.
Delusional illusions,
crazy thoughts in my head.
I'd scream to them, " Just Go Away...
and leave me here for dead!"
Fear filled my heart,
every fiber of my soul.
I didn't know how to start,
to escape this deep dark hole.
The voices gradually faded,
yet, still I found no peace.
By hunger I was soon invaded...
and begging for release.
When I began to obey,
these voices in my head.
I knew I couldn't stay,
in this pit of the living dead.
I obeyed his every command,
and began to slowly crawl.
On strong legs I now could stand,
no longer afraid to fall.
Not only did this voice lead me,
from the pit of the living dead.
A brilliant light allowed me to see,
God's face...the voice inside my head.
Author notes
Member since May 5,2007~ "Happy Anniversary to one of my most fav's, most accomplished, and a blessing to many here on AP, thanks for being here"~ sassylilpoet (last post)
A contest entry
- who is that...? by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended August 7, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Favorites Only Please! Thank You! by poetryality.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 46 entries
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Your first stanza reminds me of my life before I opened my heart to a loving God of my understanding. The encouragement that lifts us, against all odds, is evident in this poem, and very well scribbed. The light that shines through the darkness is a glow for all to witness by your words.
You have shared your triumph with us, and for that I am most grateful. You've reminded me where I don't want to venture back to, and that God can, and will do whatever we ask if we stay strong in our faith.
A beautiful poem dear sister/friend. Thank you for entering my contest and for the anniversary wishes. I wish you all the best!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Wow
I really enjoyed this poem and the way you wrote it, I could feel myself getting so into it, wishing it would never end, its one of those that you just want to continue, it was interesting, informative, in depth and emotional. very very very well done!!!! -
that's a cool poem ^^ good luck. ^^
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I really love this poem.. you discribed the dispair and pain so well... yet still clinging to something..
Fear filled my heart,
every fiber of my soul.
I didn't know how to start,
to escape this deep dark hole.
I can really related to this part... good job.. I really needed to read it..
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yes..one can see and one can think like this.,.I love your view..well done..and my thanks for sharing such a wonderful write ...
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thank you Prab for the inspiration and the gold
Blessings,
Sassy
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I think this was very good, compared to most poems involving God that I have read. ****
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thank you stray for your lovely comments
Blessings,
Sassy
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Phenomenally Graphic and Impactual
Wow this sure hits home hard! It is a hugely and phenomenally impactual and graphic piece of poetic artistry which shows incredible empathy with the subject matter.
Intense deep and dark with a fabulous message and a lovely ending to a penned masterpiece of poetic perfection so well flowing with perfect rhyme, brilliant, love it fabulously well done! Good Luck in the contest! Should have a chance with this!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Thank you Kaz,
For your wonderful comments, glad you found some worth in this write. I think relation to a write strongly depends on personal experience of the reader...and it sounds as if you've visited that bottomless pit before
Blessings,
Sassy
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well done
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thank you Rolling
Blessings,
Sassy
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Good Work
It sounds as if you have overcome adversity in your life. Good write, although i knew early who the voice was. Hopefully this is a battle you will never again have to fight. I like it much,
WoodsonRoundtree
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Thanks Woodson for your comments and applauds. We all face battles in our lives, some more than others, though often it seems unfair when we're going through them, in the end, I've found that "what doesn't kill me, makes me stronger"
Blessings,
Sassy
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this is a very good piece
this sounds like it came for a soul in total dispair,it is a poem that everyone can relate to at one point in time.very well writen
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thank you mylady...I wish despair wasn't part of life, but it is what it is and I guess we can thank Eve and that delicious apple for that
however...survival strengthens the weak!
Blessings,
Sassy
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WOW... I liked it. its really good. I'd recomend this poem to alot of people because there is alot of people out there that really need to read this.
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Thank you Poe for your lovely comments, only someone who's been there can relate to this poem. Though I've found myself there many times, I find that each time I climb out of that deep dark pit, I'm stronger than the time before
Sorry, I'm so late in responding to your comments, but I've just returned from a mini vacation where I left some "footprints in the sand"
Blessings and,
Sassy
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