on the phone
we spoke like
hands picking 1000 dollar
cherries
touchy-feeling of the day’s bruises
of paid bills
of kitty litter
needing changing
cautious of the wires
connecting my fears
to your insecurities
but beneath the clothes
of your chain-smoking
and soft surface of my
cotton pleasantries
i hear the moon laughing
at our first kiss
when your awkward chin
bumped my terrified lips
and had to try again properly
because we were no longer
fifteen
and i have no illusions about you
guess what
i never did
you’re the perfect asshole
to my pretty bitch
who knows you tried to die
each time life gave you a
persimmon
you’re as positive as a black light
glowing a bright blue
every time you’re right
that someone ‘s out to get you
and you lie
to my face
of all places
with that small smile
when i say i’ll take you
as is
despite your rattling carburetor throat
and girlish sniffling
making each toilet overflowing
a damn shakespearean tragedy
you have such limp hands
when you’re done fighting
the drama of money and mommas
who have the gall
to still need their only
sons
so i must close my eyes
and see you naked
not just the sex
but when you stand silent
the air apologizing for orbiting
your useless waist
your worthless chest
your cheeks
like ten cents
pleading to apples
hey
stay
that is why
when i hang up
the conversation
mercifully ending
the chronicles of male pity
i can still think
yeah
this is
good
Author notes
...for jeff...
NOTE: some parts quoted from ani difranco's 'as is'
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- But then there's a moment... by Sonja.
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WHAT? You should be banned from entering the same contests as me!
There are a lot of moments in this, and I love that they are all so real. You don't faff about with all of that laaa-deee-daaaa stuff, it is what it is and that is what makes it so beautiful.
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You tell it like it is, woman
The real and the frail of life...
"cautious of the wires
connecting my fears
to your insecurities"
I Love It, Scribe!
~ Nicky♥
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I know this kind of feelings when people are talking about many "irrelevant" things but hearts and love's feelings are saying something else within their silent screams. I really like it. It has so simple but great beginning. It speaks a lot to me. Great poetry.
~Sonja~
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you’re as positive as a black light
glowing a bright blue
every time you’re right
that someone ‘s out to get you
and you lie
to my face
of all places
i can't wait meet jeff...i can tell he really means something to you. and it'll be in vegas! yeah! as for the piece, you know what i'm going to say....some really powerful imagery darce, even though i like it better when you're pissed. and honestly, i kind of got that vibe when i was reading and it caused me to interpret this oddly...nonetheless you are as solid as brick babe.
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but beneath the clothes
of your chain-smoking
and soft surface of my
cotton pleasantries
that line really stands out to me..
some wonderful imagery throughout.
m
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holy hell.
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