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die baby die, just like our love did

Smile as you sleep, this is the last time Ill be loving you
Your cold shower can wash away the dirt but not the guilt you carry
Im throwing you out into the cold so you can freeze to death
Pushing you into the water, no life jacket this time
Turning my knife in your black heart
Tonight youre gonna die like I did everytime
So baby fall fast, fall hard
This is me ruining you, tearing you apart
Im breaking you like you broke me
{Un}true love from the start
Tired of having sealed lips and blind eyes
My scars will always remind me of you
So kiss these scars and feel my pain
Im about to lose it- you lost me
Im painting over FOREVER with the blood I shed, replacing it with ALWAYS AND NEVER
Crossing out PROMISE and rewriting LIE
Hush your silent screams
This death will be quite quick
Crushing all your remaining hopes of us
Die baby die
Take this as a goodbye, a resignation of my unconditional love
Let your heart rest in pieces and mine in the trash

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A contest entry

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  • Ginger Woods
    January 1

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    Murder is never a good option, but I always hear about the ones who loved so well always ended up being the ones who got nothing, when they fight back they get even less, unless you count jailtime as something. Good write, and good luck


  • UnHoLy-VeNgEaNcE
    October 20, 2008
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    love is a....it sucks...but when u do love some one then its true


  • xXBipolarXx
    October 16, 2008
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    Wow.

    This is great. Kind of um.....choppy (for lack of a better word)but gosh man you got talent!


  • xXBrutalRomanceXx
    September 28, 2008
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    i won't read this until you put what i said to put in your AN.


  • vampireblood
    September 15, 2008

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    I like this. It was full of such pain. Guys in general just suck most of the time lol. Nice write. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy


  • Justmenow
    September 10, 2008

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    wow this shows how love can be turned into such a feral aggresive creature so quickly once again an incredible piece of work from you, well done

    my fave part is this

    'Hush your silent screams
    This death will be quite quick
    Crushing all your remaining hopes of us
    Die baby die
    Take this as a goodbye, a resignation of my unconditional love
    Let your heart rest in pieces and mine in the trash '

    well done

    x


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    September 8, 2008
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    Wow. When I looked at the title and then the color scheme of the page, I thought it was too bright for something of dead like this. So I thought it was about an actual infant, although upon reading the whole thing i'm assuming that it's not. Anyway besides from that little confusion, nicely...put together poem. thanks for the entry.


  • skilter
    August 15, 2008
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    love sucks.

  • know one
    August 10, 2008
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    wow

    exelent expression!!!Great write. Thank you so much for entering my contest!


  • Lislaine
    August 7, 2008
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    wow!! this is exactly how I feel for my ex... wow im amazed!!


  • The.Tango.Emily
    July 31, 2008
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    Wow! Great!
    Welcome to the finalists!


  • mds5158
    July 26, 2008

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    Very poignant. There is always a tendency to hope that a bad break up hurts the other person as much as it hurt you, and when you know it didn't, it's some times therapy to imagine inflicting the suffering that the other person should be feeling. Laced with malice and lovely.


    • Lonely Christina
      July 26, 2008
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      exactly, im not one to wish bad things on ppl but this one deserved it lol yuppers! thanks 4 ur comment


  • SoldiersRain
    July 24, 2008
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    Ouch. I felt like every blow was hitting home. Amazing write.

    Tal.


  • Love-EroticPoet
    July 24, 2008

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    Real random, the title hit me before I open it.lol
    Great use of words, lines 13 and 15 helps with seeing as well as feeling the emotions. a rock rythm type of poem.


  • peridotPixi
    July 24, 2008

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    i really think you did a great job with this totaly random poem, i like the pain you have expressed here, and the thoughts you have used i like how you write over the promise with "lie" it speaks loudly, keep up the wonderful writing, ~your wifey Amy


    • Lonely Christina
      July 24, 2008
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      thanks hun u kno i really did feel pain while writing it i even cried alil lol love you wifey

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