a woman
dressed in black -
weeping willow
Author notes
have been writing haiku for 2 decades and am still learning about them.
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats Myron - well deserved win!
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It just makes me feel the sorrow and hear the tears. A great juxtaposition. Congratulations on the gold.
marlene
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Hi Myron,
Makes me think of weeping widow - perhaps there is an opportunity to play on words using the title? -
Widow
woman
dressed in black -
weeping willow
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good
I liked this and straight away made her old and Italian -
beautiful myron. ! I think of so many things. A woman at a funeral sitting under a Weeping Willow and crying. I also think of a burned tree.... I have no idea why LOL. And i think of the way this women might be bent over.... Like sitting oh her knees with her shoulders hunched; like the tree
. Great piece. You really should be the co-judge; not me. 
great haiku!
-sailor ptolema -
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HAHAHA, you're the co-judge because your muse is dead!!
And plus, I like you.
Though, myron has GOT to the be the coolest teacher who ever failed me.
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"am still learning about them."
Oh, I'm going to smacketh you!! Hahaha, I think everyone knows you're the almighty master of these damn haiku.
Anyways! Bitter feelings aside (haha), this was freaking awesome. Do you know how many "haiku" I've been reading that aren't haiku at all?!!!!! I'm unable to write a haiku, but you know, I think I can recognize when a poem is NOT a haiku (except when it's my own, of course).
"weeping willow"
Man, that is so, so, brilliant!! Agh!!
Though...wouldn't your first lines be a metaphor? Okay, I'm very confused & really shouldn't be questioning anything you write.
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