An eclipse
My love
Shadowed
By an eclipse
Hidden behind
The dark mask
Cold and brutal
Bewitching her mind
Confusing her thoughts
I reach out
Attempt to shine the light
To show her
Show her the world
As I know it
Her mind is so ensared
By his enchantments
She can not
Will not
Reach out
For me
Author notes
This is from Jacob's perspective: it's about him wanting Bella, but Edward stands between them.
You might think the I am on Team Jacob based on this poem...but I'm TEAM EDWARD!!!! This is just what Jacob's thinking. I do dearly hope that Jacob and Bella can be the best of friends though...
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wow this is a really good poem. it really gives insight into jacobs mind and feelings, really makes you feel for his character. good write, thanks for sharing!
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Great;
I love how this is the essence of Bella, and Jacob. I'm Team Jacob
so I really enjoyed this -
Especially the final few lines; beautiful!
Awesome write
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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I like how you ended this write, saying that she is so in love with Edward and she can't see Jacob... I am Team Edward all the way as well! Thanks for sharing this with us.
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This was fantastic!!!!
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this is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111..i really hope that jake will imprint on someone in braeking dawn....and that he and bella will still be friends!!!!!....anywho: the last line adds sooo much emtion to this poem!!!..i love it
keep writing
keep smiling
keep the peace!
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liduen nevermind. i'll just leave a comment saying your name. you wont be deleted anymore.
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u have until tonight to add your username in your authors notes or your poem will be deleted. sorry.
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Wow bewitching!
Wow bewitching! This is so eloquently expressed, simple in form yet complex in thought given its depth and intricate pondering, leading the reader through the weaving poetic trip into a pensive enchantment.
Lovely well used graphic descriptives, flow and rhyme perfect also. Love it, enjoyable read you are very talented and pen well poetic mastery. Well done! Bravo!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Good write here
Often when we set our minds to a form we often totally ignore thos around us trying to help us see we are going the wrong way .And in our own persistence of being right we find in the end the very pain we were warned of and know it could have all been avoided if we had taken the time to listen and follow the warnings so given
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"Hidden behind
The dark mask
Cold and brutal
Bewitching her mind
Confusing her thoughts" that was my favorite part i loved the whole poem alot. Very well written -
I really enjoyed reading this...to me it didn't sound like Jacob so much, at least in New Moon..more of him now than then. But it's really good.
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In my mind this poem is from eclipse...
Thanks for commenting!
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love this poem, for it waqs intense and heartfelt not boring and meaning nothing to me. great job. plan to read more of your work.
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awww that was really good. and GO TEAM EDWARD! lol. I have a few from Jacob too.
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