I must have had 'touch me' written all over my face
when your lips found me out under neon lights
and you lifted me up
for the joy of being eighteen and alive
in our alcohol-soaked skins.
Its three in the morning-
time for my conscience to catch up with me.
Taxi-cab lights shine a path to the door,
we're still dancing in our heads
to cheap lights and fractious beats,
But my feet drag heavy with responsibility
and we avoid gazes in the hallway.
Later,
Sharing air in the spaces between,
That no-man's-land where our bodies don't quite touch.
Fumbled kisses-
and we're falling too hard to stop.
We were each other's late-night mistake.
Author notes
more a diary entry than a poem, sorry about that. i'll change it sometime
A contest entry
- Mistakes and Memories by whiterabbit..
380 points, ended August 28, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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much love
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You create the most wonderful imagery...so many components wrapped up into your words. You suck the reader instantaneously with the first line. This is great!
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ahhhh i love this sooo much
the imagery and emotion in this is fantastic
I must have had 'touch me' written all over my face
when your vodka lips found me out under neon lights
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Taxi-cab lights shine a path to the door,
we're still dancing in our heads
to cheap lights and fractious beats,
But my feet drag heavy with responsibility
and we avoid gazes in the hallway.
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loooove those parts
lots of luck in the contests <3 -
wow I love this piece, especially how you didnt go indepth into the actuall mistake, this makes the reader think and pay attention to what you have previously been written. love the way in which you described the night leading up to the mistake, great use of language and rythm.
awesome write.
Thanks for entering
All the best
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I really like this. It's written so well. I love all of the emotions and descriptions that are in here. I can relate to the feelings here. Wonderful job doll. I love it.
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