So many years wasted trying
to sort out who was to blame.
Acid words degenerated our lips
and left a deposit on our hearts.
Perhaps we should have coated life
with thickly honeyed oblivion,
for sometimes it is unwise to share truth.
In the end,
the unyielding temptation to be honest has worn me
to a thin, translucent leaf of parchment.
My skin peels away like an onion’s—
I no longer have the energy to pretend
or to fight.
I wear my bruised feelings like a party hat
celebrating my bitterness in plain sight.
Author notes
2. blame , anything to do with this word
the blame game
put the blame on me....
Prompt: Coffeehouse word bank #3: blame, honey, truth, end, temptation, thin, pretend, fight, hat, sight.
A contest entry
- Set your muse and mine- lot of options by poetic-enigma21.
450 points, ended August 6, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gimme your greenies by crazymomma.
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Any title suggestions are most welcome
Comments
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ohhh!!! this is good!!!...metaphor..tone..voice..pace..i love how emotional the write is..but at the time u made it subtle..and w/ just the right amount of bitterness in the poem..very good job
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Very nice take on the blame" prompt. I enjoyed reading. thanks for entering and good luck
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wow, i am impressed by your way of writting, use of metaphors,superb write
thanks for your entry
good luck
cheers shilpa
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great write with the word bank Bella
i like the title Jems suggested
x judie x
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your metaphors drag me in to wherever it is i need to be... this piece speaks in a subtle voice that lends itself to emotion... great piece!!!
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I love this.
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