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In Africa

 

Golden fountain pens
on marble tables
fine words
from bemedalled men
Smiles, opulence
and too many uniforms


Queues for food
as planes bring supplies

of arms

 

 


Alone and terrified


they came in the night

 

Now she is alone.

"Mummy!"
"Daddy!"

Silence.

All she has left,
the memory
of screams

and blood.

 

 

 

 

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Raw and in free verse was the request. Raw enough?

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  • Cannonsfire
    July 26, 2008

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    Now you have a forethought of the corruption, greed and the powers that think they help but never do and the ending of what is an everyday occurrence for people in Africa when corruption and rebels take over. Yes it does help!


  • capricornpoet
    July 24, 2008
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    Sad and true

    This is sad and true of many countries of Africa.


  • Wolf Mancini
    July 24, 2008

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    Superb !

    A nightmarish moment captured in time...this is horrifying...I love it.
    A shot of darkness.
    No where to go...nobody left to save.
    ...poor child....eeek!


    wolf


  • Merry Christmas
    July 24, 2008

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    Definitely raw enough in my opinion. You captured the mood perfectly. I remember lying in bed as a child and imaging what it would be like if that happened to me whenever I heard strange noises outside, feeling the intsense terror and fear grip me. You captured that fear and terror somehow.


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    I think you did good! It is 'raw' but Cannonsfire I see will make you write more. Juls


  • Cannonsfire
    July 24, 2008
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    A little too raw lol...when I said raw I meant describe what you see inside your head, all the thoughts and horror and real feelings we keep hidden in there. There is much more to this than what you have, give me the story and make it poetic.

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