Your eyes are burning like a disease
Pandemic mean I'm caught within
I listen to the way you speak
I'm caught between your black heart dreams
What can I say to you
To clue you in to what to do
You shine brighter than the moon
You're wound so tight
You're quite a sight
If I ever wanted to fly
Then get me high
High as the sky
The world is spread below my feet
I cannot speak
My brain has peaked
Your heart's a metronome
You beat me on the phone
I'm black and blue right to the bone
You're wound so tight
You're quite a sight
If I ever wanted to fly
Then get me high
High as the sky
The world is spread below my feet
I cannot speak
My brain has peaked
Your heart's a metronome
You beat me on the phone
I'm black and blue right to the bone
You're wound so tight
You're quite a sight
I listen to the way you speak
I'm caught between your black heart dreams
Your eyes are burning like a disease
I'd better run and stay clear
Before I let you get too near...
Author notes
lyrics by dstreetpoet
A contest entry
- Inspire Me by shelly webster.
2000 points, ended August 6, 2008, 29 entries
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Comments
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The first two stanzas really locked me in. I loved the assonance.
Very cool. I also liked how you switched around the three lines from the beginning at the end, it really put a finishing touch on the piece. The only thing I didn't like was the repetition of the "..wanted to fly" and "metronome" stanzas. I started to lose that focus on the words. But, overall I liked it. 
Thank you for entering. -
Sounds so Right ...
and sometimes distance can be a be motivator! Let the memories serve you well and keep on writing those lyrics that serve to inspire! There's plenty more where the first came from and it's not over until ...
Good luck with the productions ... joy
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