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It is almost as though I were born to watch you fall apart

You stand before me,
tears streaming,
eyes begging,
asking me for guidance.
Must I remind you another time
of the bitter words,
spat in anger,
when you'd had too much to drink.
You've torn me apart for the last time,
but I won't leave your side.
No, not when you need me like you do.

Nearly nineteen years ago
you had your second little girl.
She was your little Angela..
named for the Angels,
but little did you know
that one day,
she would become the mother figure.
The responsible one
who would be your rock..
your guardian..
the only one who cared at all.

All my life I've watched
as you slowly throw it all away.
Each sip destroys your core..
the very essence
of the mother I once adored.
I pick you up each time you fall,
and each time you pull away
as if I mean nothing at all.

No matter how many times,
or in how many different ways,
you toss my love for you aside
I'll always be right here.
It's as if this were my duty..
as your guardian Angel.
Was I born to watch you fall apart?

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It is almost as though I were born to watch you fall apart

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  • aanika
    February 6

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    no.

    this was more of a story than anything else. I could feel the emotion, but we're looking for people with strong poetic skills.

    thank you for entering and good luck with everything


  • stasis
    February 1

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    no

    This is incredibly sad, it made me think of a lot of the members in my family. However, in my opinion, it was too blunt. I feel as though you could have used more imagery and metaphor. It would back so much more punch if used the right way.

    Please wait for the other judge to comment.

    ♣ Tegan


  • leander Moderators member
    November 27, 2008

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    This is a very sad poem that you have written here, but you brought it in a beautiful way.

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 18, 2008

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    What a heart wrenching poem. Beautiful, although sad, great write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • OldBear34 silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    Great Phrasing!

    You have beautifully recorded the role of the alcoholic enabler; the one who puts up even with degradation to fulfill the role of savior for one who refuses to be saved, rejecting both you and your efforts to be her rock. Great Job!


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    July 29, 2008

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    This is very close to home. I have a family member that is an alcoholic and I feel like this very much. That I am the adult and that they aren't.

    Thank you very much for entering


  • Night Terrors
    July 27, 2008

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    OH thats sooooo sad! It made me tear up. You must be so brave and so strong congrades your a finalist


  • Nostalgic Moon
    July 24, 2008

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    angela marie you are a guardian angel. i love your poem. surprisingly, i understand, but thats probly just cuz i know your mom lol. its very beautiful


  • faderman1959
    July 24, 2008

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    Excellent take on the option! You nailed this one! It speaks with such emotion and truth! Great write!


    • Angierie
      July 24, 2008
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      Thanks so much.
      it was kinda hard to write.
      hard to face the truth sometimes

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