Average lesbian,
hot guy.
Having sex,
for the first time.
Virgin girl,
nempho boy.
No feelings,
for either child.
NO true orgasm,
just semen.
Two weeks,
pregnancy test.
Positive test,
positive tears.
Sixteen years old,
partially alone.
Angry mother,
denial dad.
Frustrated sister,
thrilled best friend.
Morning after morning,
puke hits toilet.
Nine months,
baby girl.
Boy ignores,
girl smiles.
He is yet a child,
she is yet a mother.
Having something her own,
so grateful it hurts.
Average lesbian,
tiny baby.
Being a mom,
for the first time.
Alarm clock buzzes,
eyes open.
Afraid of dream,
turns to the side.
Sees,
a miracle baby.
SMiles to herself,
loving every moment.
Beautiful baby girl,
smiling back.
Author notes
got bored from working a ten to six shift with no sleep..dont be too harsh
Please tell me what you think
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Wow
That was AMAZING!
It truley shows how a young mother feels when she looks at her child!
I love how you wrote that he is still a child, but she is now a mother.
It shows that she has grown so much due to his mistake and yet he has stayed the same!
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Powerful!
Powerful impactual poem of great value by way of a hard hitting message that should be published in Teen magazines and school newsletters etc.
I loved this poem it is bang on beam.
Typo Errors: "denail dad" (Denial).
"so greatful it hurts" (grateful)
I am terrible for typo errors as I am dyslexic but these jumped out at me, sorry to mention them hate being critical but would have been awful and unfair to you not to point them out! Sorry to do this! Otherwise fabulous poetic masterpiece, Well done!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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mmm, this is a very interesting poem with a striking form and provoking language. at first it may be viewed as simple but I think there is so much going on behind the words. great expression!
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I love the progression, and the short bursts of words just drive the thoughts home. It seems detached at first then becomes very connescted. Great writing
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Wow
This is an intense piece, great emotion!
"Sees, a miracle baby. Smiles to herself,loving every moment. Beautiful baby girl, smiling back."
I love that through it all, something good can be found through the love of a child.
Amazing write, keep it up.
Life Unknown
Alexander
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