Shaded canvas high
magenta blended in blue
orange ball hangs low.
azure envelopes
buzzing humanity down
long gaze from window.
Cream light filters in
petals on my closed eyelids
soft gentle kisses.
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Untraditional haiku...
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Stunning
your words breathe this canvas of colours
best wishes to you
Julie
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thanks dear..I write a lot about sun and moon, glad you enjoyed this too
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very soothing and full of delicate imagery. what an enjoyable read. <3
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Thank you ..I am glad you like it!
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Such a beautiful picture you have painted. I was filled with such a sense of peace while reading your masterpiece. Thanks for sharing hugs Theresa
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Sunsets are always lovely aren't they?
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Wow, must have taken some doing! >.< Forms make my head hurt
You have done a brilliant job, I like it, it is refershing to read 
Love the picture you paint, beautifully done.
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I personally love haiku...Really glad you like this one
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I like this untraditional haiku, it's something different. Good write!
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Thanks!
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shaded canvas high
magenta blended in blue
orange ball hangs low
azure envelopes
buzzing humanity down
long gaze from window
cream light filters in
petals on my closed eyelids
soft gentle kisses
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I think 'ku 1 and 2 are too metaphorical lol they're lovely but 'ku are more of a snapshot of life...
for the last one, maybe:
light filters
petals touch eyelids
a kiss >>>>>>>I think this is more literal while still retaining the
multiple interpretations...
I'm going to ask myron though; as he's the master
I'd go look at his haiku too; to maybe help you see what I mean
-tell me if you edit
-sailor ptolema
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The plural form of 'haiku' is 'haiku'
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Thanks for pointing that out..didn't know
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So, lovely ladies? LoLoL please explain
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Jessica and Ptolema...Haiku does not have a title atleast the traditional ones do not, they take the first line of the haiku itself.....
But could not resist dragging both of my friends in the title
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