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Horizon Pallet

Shaded canvas high     
magenta blended in blue
orange ball hangs low.

azure envelopes
buzzing humanity down
long gaze from window.

Cream light filters in
petals on my closed eyelids
soft gentle kisses.

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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 15

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    Stunning
    your words breathe this canvas of colours
    best wishes to you
    Julie


    • crimsondew
      April 15
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      thanks dear..I write a lot about sun and moon, glad you enjoyed this too


  • decode
    April 13
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    very soothing and full of delicate imagery. what an enjoyable read. <3


  • tawk gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Such a beautiful picture you have painted. I was filled with such a sense of peace while reading your masterpiece. Thanks for sharing hugs Theresa


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Wow, must have taken some doing! >.< Forms make my head hurt You have done a brilliant job, I like it, it is refershing to read Love the picture you paint, beautifully done.


    • crimsondew
      October 29, 2008
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      I personally love haiku...Really glad you like this one


  • whits end silver member
    August 16, 2008
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    I like this untraditional haiku, it's something different. Good write!


  • sailor ptolema
    July 24, 2008

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    shaded canvas high
    magenta blended in blue
    orange ball hangs low



    azure envelopes
    buzzing humanity down
    long gaze from window



    cream light filters in
    petals on my closed eyelids
    soft gentle kisses

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    I think 'ku 1 and 2 are too metaphorical lol they're lovely but 'ku are more of a snapshot of life...


    for the last one, maybe:

    light filters
    petals touch eyelids
    a kiss >>>>>>>I think this is more literal while still retaining the

    multiple interpretations ...
    I'm going to ask myron though; as he's the master

    I'd go look at his haiku too; to maybe help you see what I mean

    -tell me if you edit

    -sailor ptolema



  • notorious gold member
    July 24, 2008
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    The plural form of 'haiku' is 'haiku'


    • crimsondew
      July 24, 2008
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      Thanks for pointing that out..didn't know


      • notorious gold member
        July 24, 2008
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        So, lovely ladies? LoLoL please explain

        • crimsondew
          July 24, 2008

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          Jessica and Ptolema...Haiku does not have a title atleast the traditional ones do not, they take the first line of the haiku itself.....
          But could not resist dragging both of my friends in the title

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