new photo albums
my display case of cliché
future yesterdays
Author notes
I've written 4 or 5 haiku in the past.
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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more of a senryu than haiku
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new photo album
my display case
of yesterdays
what do you think of my edits? I eliminated 'cliche' because it's an idea... not tangible
I'm not a master of these; so I will probably ask myron about my edits lol; but I think they help capture a clearer picture
also; the title of haiku tend to be the first line
-tell me if you make edits
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I like it... but doesn't a haiku need 17 syllables?
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Love those edits. I think "my display case of haiku" would be better off in freeverse..probably.
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don't be a give-up !
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Huh? I have an amazing attitude towards failing, who said I gave up?!!!
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"my display case of cliche"
I like that.
Although...haiku shouldn't be capitalized in the beginning, so please fix the capitalized 'New' & 'Future'.
Thanks for entering
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Nicely done. A nice haiku in the classical form. I like it alot.
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