Staggering breathing through red slitted throats,
one final breath sighs, sounds sorry and pale.
Final cries echo though hearing no notes,
Staggering breathing through red slitted throats.
Suspended in air, real near you grim floats,
your eyes tell you've realised, love did not fail.
Staggering breathing through red slitted throats,
one final breath sighs, sounds sorry and pale.
One final breath sighs, sounds sorry and pale,
take it in slowly and live till the last.
Winds subtle and dieing, flutters so frail,
one final breath sighs, sounds sorry and pale.
your eyes glazing over from death's white vial,
still tearing from memoirs lost to the past.
One final breath sighs sounds sorry and pale,
take it in slowly and live till the last.
Take it in slowly and live till the last,
release your soul on the tip of your breath.
Hell's surely morbid, so lonely and vast,
take it in slowly and live till the last.
Wait dear, love wait, don't give up so fast,
don't let slip red fingers and fall in death.
Take it in slowly and live till the last,
release your soul on the tip of your breath.
Author notes
Inspired by my "..good friend Sweeney.."
if I could I would go more in debt but for those who have not seen it and plan to I don't want to ruin it
sorry if I already have....
((I HEART Benjamin Barker))
This is my second attempt at a intertwining trilot. For some reason I live my first better, titled Bare Branches.
This was more of a
(muse speaking) "Quick! Here's some inspiration! Write Sweeney Todd Stuff. By tomorrow I'm gone."
kinda poem. I wrote it in less then an hour, about five~ish hours ago. Already I lost my urge to write about my good friend Sweeney.
A contest entry
- ChiLdReN oF ThE KoRn by Poetic Obscenity.
550 points, ended July 25, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Haha
It actually did give me the feel of that song before i even looked at your authors notes. You've got a great piece here. I really enjoyed it. -
These would make really good lyrics in a musical. I liked, no, Love them!
~The forrest vampire child
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