On this day where we
Pledge each others lives
To one an other I wanted to tell you
What you mean to me.
You are my everything.
You've stood by my side all this time
Through thick and thin, and I know
You will always be here.
You are my daylight when I feel down.
You are food for my soul.
I love you more than I love life
And that sure means a lot.
When you entered my life it was a surprise.
I definitely wasn't looking for love, let alone marriage.
But after a few years I asked you to be my wife.
To spend old age with me.
And to watch the sunrise and set forever and ever.
A contest entry
- for my wedding by Eternal Cascade.
600 points, ended August 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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aw super sweet great work
vanna -
hi again,
just back to leave my thoughts, this is a super job i love how its written in the words of the groom or my husband to be, if only he could produce something like this for me..
anyway at the start i hadn't realised what i was looking for but now understand that a poem not in the words of the bride or groom is actually what i want as it will be read be a friend on the day, but apart from that minor issue this piece is very deserving of a place and i wish i could reward everyone!!
thankyou so much for entering,
Much Love,
JJ x
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Very nice ; reminded me muchly of 'Sunrise, Sunset' from Fiddler on the Roof; a song which I love bigtime.
"to spend old age with me" - second last line was lovely I think, I'm not sure why, something about the way that it is phrased is just appealing.
Nice job - and best of luck in the contest
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great stuff!!
thankyou for entering i will be back at the end of the contest to comment,
good luck,
JayJay
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