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Angel Eyes

Angel Eyes,
why do you shed tears of crimson?

Angel Eyes,
who has burnt you wings of snow?

Angel Eyes,
what makes your heart shudder in discontent?

Angel Eyes,
how do I help you to ease your cumbersome burden?

Angel Eyes,
why have your tears turned to garnet ice?

Angel Eyes,
why have you forsaken the heart I hold for you?

Angel Eyes,
will you ever forgive me for singing your wings?

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  • AnonymousXO
    July 24, 2008

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    I love the vocabulary here. "garnet ice" and "cumbersome burden" those are REALLY well written. (i still sound like an english teacher) And I also like the repetition. Clappy time!
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  • JaydinC
    July 23, 2008
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    wow...very nice indeed. I liked the repetivness of the title, sometimes that gets very annoying, but this time it worked.
    Angel Eyes,
    why have your tears turned to garnet ice?

    Angel Eyes,
    why have you forsaken the heart I hold for you

    My favorite lines I loved the garnet ice....wow just the imagery is great. Even the background fit the poem. Nice job