I can't wait to meet you,
My lost and dearest love.
Your hair; like the sweet dew,
Fallen from high above.
The great scent of your sweet,
and tender loving care.
The thought of your tapping feet,
Walking across the square,
Brings music to my ears.
Hope for love at first sight.
To let fall our first tear,
Of the most wondrous night.
Can't wait for it to occur,
Sent by an angel, you were.
Author notes
Tried going for a Shakespearian sonnet except with a twist. Instead of iambic pentameter I went for a hexameter. I can't really say what kind of "feet" are used out of the following: spondee, iamb, trochee, dactyl, anapest, or pyrrhic. The use of those has never been specialty. ^^"" ANYWAY I hope you like the poem. The contest, the song title was a great name and then I thought about it and it gave me this idea for a title and plot. I hoped you like the read. ^^
song and artist: "Send Me An Angel" by Real Life.
A contest entry
- Title / Lyric Inspiration #1 by Errant Panther.
500 points, ended August 7, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In Desperate Need of Inspiration by JustFallingApart.
300 points, ended August 25, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - project un-cliche by hks.
800 points, ended October 3, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice Work
Hello there I am a judge for the Project Un-Clinche contest and anyways this is a well penned poem. I really like this alot. I read from down below from the original contest this wa sin that you were doing a sonnet. I must say I am quite unfamiliar with the form but you did a good job with it. any ways a mighty fine penned poem you have done here and keep up the good work & good luck in te contest(s) -
nice write
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TY for entering this lovely read...Well done!
Lynda
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Not having written or even attempted a shakespearian sonnet I am a little lost about your comments regarding meter. In any case you have penned a charming piece from the given prompt, well done.
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Oh I'm sorry. ^^"" Well a Shakespearian sonnet is normally lines with 10 syllables and a certain beat or meter for each line. But I just cut down the number of syllables and beats. But the rhyme scheme is like that of a Shakespearian sonnet. (abab cdcd efef gg)
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