rain bursts
swollen creek's form
sandbags arrive
Author notes
Twenty years haiku experience
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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rain bursts
swollen creek's form
sandbags arrive
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I can't think of anything; not that I can top your experience in the least lol.
I can see this happening ....and it also make me think of an ambulance arriving to save the day
LOL
great 'ku!
-sailor ptolema
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ah there have been a lot of sandbags in england of late, last year was mental, this years is just as mad as a hatter
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20 years of haiku...well, damn!
Both the beginning & end lines have TONS of action going on...and I like that.
"swollen creek's form"
Interesting...I wonder what you mean by 'swollen' though...could you explain?
Thanks for entering!
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When a creek is completely rushing with water to the point where it fills to the top of the banks, the water spreads beyond the creek and floods the land around it. The creek is sometimes referred to as "swollen" as it floods. News reports say that:
"Yesterday's rain caused swollen creeks locally. The creeks' form changed overnight as flood waters spilled out onto properties, causing widespread damage."
Thank you for your kind comment.
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I don't watch the news that often
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