VERSE 1:
My toes in the sand
my guitar in hand
I'll sing you a song about me
and I'll make sure I'll miss
all those times we kissed
under the stars in the sky
CHORUS:
And I am tryin to believe
my heart wants nothing more
but the sun doesn't shine in Florida
today it only pours
VERSE: 2
Why do these emotions feel so wrong
I can't help but sing this song
God I wish I knew
how to get through to you
To bring down these walls I cower behind
CHORUS:
And I am tryin to believe
my heart wants nothing more
but the sun doesn't shine in Florida
today it only pours
VERSE 3:
And I'm not gonna lie
it hurts inside
and my heart still aches for you now
CHORUS:
And I am tryin to believe
my heart wants nothing more
but the sun doesn't shine in Florida
today it only pours
My toes in the sand
my guitar in hand
I'll sing you a song about me
In a list
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very nice indeed. Is this one of the songs on the myspace? I enjoyed them by the way.
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lovely...very powerful lyrics...how I wish I could also hear this one...thank you for sharing this one!!!
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this is really good. i liked it alot. it reminds me of one of my good friend's and whet she's going through.
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I wish i could hear this with music to it
The lyrics are alright, but the picture the paint is beautiful
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i was listening to instrumentals when i read this... im glad it was lyrics... i could put music to it... great emotion in your words... loved it... great job
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... yet again beef it up ... well maybe could be acoustic i guess .. btw it has always rained like everyday in florida since i lived here lol
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That was extremly good...I wasnt expecting lyrics but I was kind of happy it was. The words are dark and heavy in a lighted sense. The emotion is real and honest and I actually sang it to a tune in my head as I was reading it. Great job
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This was really good. I loved your chorus! Amazing! =]
I especially loved this part of the chorus:
"but the sun doesn't shine in Florida
today it only pours"
Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest. =]
<3 Vampy -
I like it!
I think the chorus is really good, and the verses seem to come from way down deep.
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I love the chorus. Your song/poem overall is truly amazing. It was so beautiful, I felt your emotions in every line. And the words flowed smoothly. I don't know when you wrote this, but I hope things are going better for you now. Thank you for putting an option and for entering my contest.
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A very intense write..the lyric flow smoothly through..very well put together..thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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Thanks so so much!
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Oh, i really really like it! Well done, good luck
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Thank you so much!
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I actually kind of liked verse 2.
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Thank you!!!
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Amazing
im at a loss of words to describe how much i really enjoyed reading this. it really touches me and its SUPER DUPER OOPER AMAZING
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Thank you so much, I really appreciate it
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