I was perfect for too long, but I hope you understand
That I can't go any longer bending backwards to eat out of your hand
As you laugh at how I stretch and fight to stay alive,
Trying my damndest to make it worth it for me to strive.
All I ever thought I wanted has sunken from my view.
I try to love, but can't seem to get past the mask that covers you.
Can't you understand that I'm trying not to give in,
But I feel as though I am compelled to mingle with sin.
We can't go on like this, for it's your trust I cannot win.
I feel like I must imprison myself just so I can't be done in.
I'm begging you to let me choose my road on my own.
You choose to do as you wish. Why can't I be left alone?
Author notes
Just typing how I feel.
A contest entry
- Blue October - Hate Me by Barely Breathing.
450 points, ended July 27, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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O my this is a good write here
It has depth and the need to be oneself for to be a puppet for another the person dies within Good write here
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Ooo, I love that first line! The entire poem is amazing, I love the emotions you've given this, all the struggles that are shown in the words. Wonderful.
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This is such a great write and I could really feel the emotion in this. Well done and thanks for entering my contest.
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this was really great, ur like the only person i kno that can make your poetry rhyme, and it still sounds good. normally i think its cliche and it bothers me, but yours is always great good job!
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wowww. this is amazing. you can write like no otherr, for real. i'm supaa jealous. I LOVE THAT LAST LINE, it is amazing.
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