Fingertips trace sensuality
before shivers fade,
laying ley lines
between Dali-like limbs,
pathways are traversed
along subtle curves,
soft melody
whispers through
laden air;
we inhale melded memories
cooling sweated skin.
Half moon smile
reveals how I feel like earth
when spring breaks,
contented within bloom
of your arms.
Author notes
Link 1 : http://www.poetry.com/LovePoems/lovepoem.asp?id=171 - God, the way your little finger moved - Stephen Crane
Link 2 : http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Parc/9842/unchain.html - Unchained Melody - The Righteous Brothers
A contest entry
- Love...forbidden words by Luna Tique Fringe.
1400 points, ended August 4, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 'i love you' by Naridill.
650 points, ended September 15, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique Requested
Comments
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Oh my, I am in good trophy company and love it that I see a shiny trophy on this piece. So wonderfully done. Excellent work. Congratulations my friend.
~Pamela 
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I really like this one. Particularly the first and last stanzas.
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fabulous imagery and impeccable flow..
we inhale melded memories
cooling sweated skin.
perfect description..your genius is shining my friend..
thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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this is a beautiful and amazingly written write, I lve the metaphors and the powerful vocab used here. well done uncle
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