Fingers spreading orbs of warmth
like the sweet-blood stains
you serenaded from my neck
white-washed by the remembrance
of the essence
of your touch
and its electric
white-hot
mark
your hungry lips
steeping me to the hilt
in your untamed ardor
God help me.
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Ooh! I love the first line especially!
This is awesome! Your poems are so sensual...this one in particular has so many unusual, original visual references. Nice job!
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Passionate and powerful. A truly sensual write!
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wow very sensual and dark.... tempting indeed... nicely penned my friend you did a very good job here...
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what great imagery ... the arrangement of the line breaks really captures the theme.
thanks.
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Lovely work here and a great thought
that you have written. Thanks a lot for
sharing it here!
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Very sweet
I really liked the flow of this poem, and the form is excilent!
Blessings
Rend
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I agree with burnblue, this is a unique poem...my favorite lines: like the sweet-blood stains
you serenaded from my neck
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Never before...
Never before have I read something like this before. I like it. Good work. -
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I am glad I could help you to experience something new. Thank you for your kind comment. :]
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This is stunning. I love the amazing flow of it, and the way it goes into a single word at 'mark.'
Amazing job.
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I'm glad you liked it, and I appreciate your comment. :]
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Today's Poem: 11/02/2008
Such a beautiful poem. I love the imagery and the emotion in this. I especially loved the second and third lines.
Write on!
~*~SP~*~
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Thank you!!!! :]
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your hungry lips
steeping me to the hilt
in your untamed ardor
I have one thing to say about this: WOW! and again, WOW! Even for such a short piece, it detracts nothing from this piece. Great. -
flawless
A strong display of love and lust with perfect metaphors and a steady flow. Perfect
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Powerfully sensual and compelling dear poetress. You know your craft well. BRAVO!
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