of all the things that through the years
we'll give each other, laughter, tears
the things that I want you to hold
are not memories or made of gold
it may be selfish, I understand
to ask of you this gesture grand
but as my soul, my other half
you'll understand and maybe laugh
that all I need in this crazy life
is you beside me as my wife
and tho it sounds a bit cliche
I'll be there for you in every way
and when you cry I'll wipe your tears
probably laugh if your makeup smears
I'll wrap you up when you get cold
I'll be at your side even when you grow old
and when we pass on our spirits will know
that this energy here is what helped me to grow
and even if we should go on our own way
the love that we shared will echo and stay
so please, all I ask is you hold on to me
I'll do the same, and together we'll be
Author notes
best wishes!
A contest entry
- for my wedding by Eternal Cascade.
600 points, ended August 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I agree with most of the gals
below...
any woman would truly love to hear these heartfelt words...
even if she won't admit it!
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yes i'm with symphony this certainly does have a real aww factor, i'm not a grammar or spelling dragon though and find myself criticised for this also , bad people we are lol!!
anyway that makes no difference to how i view a poem, i felt this was very endearing and read it with the voice of my husband to be i'd very much love him to say these words to me any woman would!!
i hadn't realised at the start what i wanted but now i know that as a friend will be reading this piece in church i'm looking for something that is not in the words of the bride or groom but more an individual wishing us well if you know what i mean, a great job all the same and thankyou so much for entering!
Much Love,
JJ x
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aw, this had a real 'aw' factor to it
nice job on it though - although i saw in the line,
"and tho it sounds a bit cliche" that you used chatspeak for the word "tho" - would advise changing this ot the proper spelling
Otherwise; nice job and best of luck in the contest!
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This is so cute!
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excellent!!
thankyou for entering, i will be back to comment at the end of the contest,
good luck,
JayJay -
totally cliche
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