I miss so much
All those ersatz memories,
All those imaginary friends
All that innocence I never knew
Growing up in Bombay,
I missed Santa Monica,
Suffocating in cities
Missing that beautiful black horse
I wish I knew
I miss all of those trains and planes
In my mind, the ones I traveled by
When I missed Santa Monica too much
I miss the music that was turned off
The minute I was old enough to know what it was
I miss that Rickenbacker 350
The one I pretended to play
Whenever I felt sad from missing something else
I miss that beautiful boy
The one with a gentle smile and light hair
The one I named Jackson
I miss his laughter and his eyes,
Sparkling like the French champagne
I imagined tasting
I miss three friends
My band mates
The ones who sung all the songs I wrote
You know, the songs that stopped
I miss all those things I never had...
God, I miss someone so much
A real someone
I miss her...
I don't want to take ghost rides
To places that don't exist
Calling her name out forever...
Author notes
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A contest entry
- What Do You Miss? by Auburn Sunrise.
600 points, ended August 3, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want you to love me; [inviteonly] by ladybug..
900 points, ended October 26, 102 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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don't worry...I ca nbe really random too...and I know what it's like to miss places you've lived in...I've lived in NC, VA, and CT, and now I live in AL...I really do miss my old houses and friends sometimes....good luck!
Alicia Lynn
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I guess you'll miss winning a prize in this contest as I wanted it to be about u.. You are invited to write another poem if you'd like to describing yourself..
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You are outstanding..
for no one is forever organized...
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wow. this is brilliant work. it may have been rushed, but the emotions are there- raw, and stark. great work..i love this piece a lot.
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this was good.
i could feel the emotions behind you missing a place or someone.
thanks for entering and all the best
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Writing things down as they come, makes the best poetry.
I enjoyed your piece very much.
It was kinda a sad read.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Justgot2loveme
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ever since I saw the movie 89 Chering Cross Road I have yearned to see that word ersatz again. I love that word. Thank you for entering
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This is a very interesting poem. It seems as if your whole life has been missing things about life. I really like how this is written. How you miss doing things you did before because you were missing other things.
I so relate to going places in the mind...using the imagination to take you to other places.
Well written!
Best wishes in the contest!
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That sounds about like how I write things.
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As I was reading through this, I thought to myself, "Man, this really shows the power and joy of imagination."
But...I got to the last part, and the romantic punctuation really hit it off. I really could relate to it all...I was simply taken by the ending.
Captivating...great job. Good luck in the contest! ^.^
--Flare
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LOL. I like your author's notes. Random, huh?
Well you're in the right place, because I happen to be quite random myself - and somehow I followed the train of thought completely (or at least I think I did).
It made perfect sense to me. I am actually very impressed that a 15 year old (not to sound condescending or anythign) could write something this impressive, imaginative, and... cultured. LOL. I know that sounds so unfair for me to say, but I'm really paying you a major compliment.
Definitely a wonderful write and entry. I loved every line. The imagery was exquisite. If you haven't been those places, or experienced those things... well DAMN! Share your muse, please?
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This is a very touching poem. It has excellent flow. Many of us have things that we miss from our past. Most of us do not express it so well.
Great job.
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a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along, forget the regrets and live for right now and find something you like
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