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One Man

Whenever man ignores his dreams
A part of him is blind, it seems.
He does not know he has a soul
His self could be his only goal,
But if his shell should ever crack
A gentle person would look back.

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  • Topnotchsy
    August 18, 2008

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    This is a really great piece. Love the rhythm and meter which flowed really well, and made it easy to focus on the message of the poem. Thanks for putting it out here for us to read.

  • Ulimate
    July 28, 2008

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    *CLAP*

    Very nice write.. short but full of vision and a complete message.. i'm envious.. this is my style and i wish i would have wrote this.

    I really like this part:

    He does not know he has a soul
    His self could be his only goal,

    Great write.. you're a fav now!


    • sunray
      July 29, 2008
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      Hello!

      I can't think of a better compliment than you wishing you'd wrote it. Thank you for your appreciation which I find encouraging as my poetry writing has been secret until this week.