A Wedding Vow

I promise to always be

the candle who gives you hope

in any darkness.

A sunrise you see

lying next to you

shining with love's perfect light

at the end of any night.

To let our hearts find a rainbow

after any rain,

be the angel

that gives you heaven's kisses

for any bruise or pain.

You are the one

who holds my soul,

ever vowing to take your hand

while we stroll together

across life's waiting sand.

And to make the magic

of this wedding day,

always be the joy we live

no matter what comes our way.

A contest entry

for my wedding by Eternal Cascade. 600 points, ended August 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Eternal Cascade
August 6, 2008

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stunning!!
i am so bowled over with this piece and the only reason it did not get my gold trophy is because it is in the words of the bride/groom and at the start i hadn't realised this isn't what i was looking for as it will be recited in church by a friend, everytime i read this i imagine standing there saying these words to my husband as a tear falls down our faces its truly beautiful infact if i could read it without filling up it would be a miracle, i only wish i could put words together in this way!!!

thankyou so much for entering, i wish i could let everyone win holding a contest is easy as pie judging however is rock solid!!

Much Love,
JJ x
Symphony
August 5, 2008

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I agree entirely with Eternal Cascade! The off-kilter rhyme added to the flow I think, rather than distrupting it because you'd be so intent on hearing what came next [when read aloud] that then you'd be pleasantly surprised to find a rhyme; I'm not so sure I can enter the contest now after reading that masterpiece!!

Best of luck in the contest!
Eternal Cascade
July 24, 2008
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stunning!!
thankyou for entering i will be back to comment at the end of the contest,

Good Luck,

JayJay
OnceUponAMind
July 23, 2008

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BEAUTIFUL! I am engaged, so I've been thinking on writing my own vows This is so magnetic and full of hope and love Awww

Always, Amber
Carolina Moon
July 23, 2008

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Stunningly romantic and beautifully written. Quite the tear jerker brother dear.. To know that kind of love must be amazing.
luna-midnight
July 23, 2008

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awww, this is amazing papa, i love it
its so beautiful, the first stanza grasped my heart, i went awweee!!!! lol
good luck in the contest and take care
Stephanie ♥
lowercase prelude
July 23, 2008
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truly wonderful
this is a lovely poem

it just radiates love and faithfulness
poeticweaver
July 23, 2008
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Simply Beautiful Brother,