I stood within the ring of Stonehenge
In awe that I was there,
As if those stones had grown
My soul ceased to care
The moon so luminious and bright,
My fantasies forged the away the night
I was in awe
That I was there...
I felt the power pulse in my veins
And I heard the distant call of thunder,
The sky would open up
And be torn asunder...
My body was rooted to the ground
I saw the veils of time rent
The misty curtain before me lifted
I was at Stonehenge feeling so gifted,
Oh but the stones will stay for all time
A monument for those who will allow
A piece of history
One that will never bow
Author notes
Written February 23rd, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Echos of the Past by Ghost.
300 points, ended February 19, 2004, 15 entries
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Ah, Susan, you capture the haunting illusion,
the mystical mood that is Stonehenge.
Remarkable in a photograph,
bringing awe in person!
M-C
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this one i liked it is metaphisical
and most of all spiritual
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Susan, your poem drew me in with its hauntingly lovely images. There is so much mystery surrounding Stonehenge, and it has been one of the places I've yearned to visit within my lifetime. I'm curious, did you write this poem as a result of some kind of "astral travel" experience? Your words "in awe that I was there", which you repeated further down in the poem left that impression with me, that you may have suddenly found yourself standing amidst those ancient stones, either in a very lucid dream, or having astrally traveled there. Very well done, Susan :-)
Linda
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You need to put together a book of your nature poems. They are certainly your gift. You paint lovely pictures with your words. Even back in 2002.
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Beautiful! Stonehenge has always fascinated me, too. The imagery you painted on this page left me feeling as though I was standing there with you, lost in thought of the creation of such a magnificent work of natural art. You have a knack of presenting images to the reader. Your poetic expression is a true talent!
~Lori
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Very well written
I have always been fascinated by Stonehenge. You express the overwhelming feeling of being there so well here Sis. There are so many mysteries in the world, and this is a very interesting one.
Great job.
Ethereal Melody
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Lovely write, mystic, I like. Almost were in trouble, luckily the site screwed me when I posted the comment. I didn't notice that you didn't mark the critical because I made a...., While it was screwed I checked out the first comment so *phew*
glad I'm not going to be thrown with food...lol again nice write and good luck in the contest.
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I was at Stonehenge this time last year as it is not far from where I grew up this is a beautiful poem and I hope one day you get there it is magical and bloody cold lol!
Lakota x -
I've been to Stonehenge. It's a magical place. You can feel the energy floating around you. I myself could even feel the lost lives under my feet. As is people had been burried under that grass hundreds of years ago. It felt ancient. How could men have made this thing without the help of magic? How? I really do wonder.
I also love historical, mystical and magical things. You very well described those things in relation with Stonehenge. You're good at this! I love this poem! Thank you for writing it! BB Morgaine
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A good writing Blushfulmoon, The Stone Henge does indeed hold a certain feeling when you are in the vicinity, well done! ~~Katie~~
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Wow..many comments i see. Kewlies!
"So the sky would open up
And be torn asunder
My body was rooted to the groundI saw the veils of time rent,
The misty curtain before me lifted"
I love that part. Very beautiful. I noticed you added that it was a gate way to the other realms, like that very much. You left many things about the Stonehenge a mistory, and made one's imagination soar.
There are a few type-os as someone else i see has pointed out. So worries, i suck at spelling and what not so i really dont mind, but one line does puzzle me so:
"As my fantasies forged the away the night"
i think you have one too many 'the's there; shoud it be 'as my fantasies forged away the night'? maybe? just a thought.
Thank you Ever So much for entering your creation.
Not many have been entered, and i nearly did a victory dance when i saw someone else entered. lol
All good.
Good luck
*Stern~BLinkin*
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This paints a serene picture of stonehenge. It felt as if I was there looking at the circle myself. And it is true when you are there you can feel the power around you. I don't know why that is, but it's exhilirating.
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very super good!!!
Oh, I have never seen it save in books. I did a history project in freshman high school history class with a model of it that drove my teacher into a frenzy. I have seen websites of it with students standing around. It was beautiful. Your poem has told me alot and more about it. The standing stones. The circle. It is the wedding ring of the World.
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good
Nice job on capturing Stonehenge. Good 'sensery'...that is use of multiple senses. Not a real word, as far as I know. Although what linrose said about typos is unfortunately true, the poem itself is excellent. The rhyming scheme was a little unusual, but still good. -
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hehe just like one of my dreams :) -Brandon -
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This really sums up standing in stonehenge well, it has a overpowering feeling.
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I could only wish to travel there one day, maybe in the likes of my garden the seas will take me there :o) I find it most difficult when I'm alone however.
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Beautiful poem, full of mysticism! I really liked the lines: I saw the veils of time rent,/The misty curtain before me lifted; what a wondrous place this must be..one place I truly hope to visit one day :-) Susan, I know you didn't request critical comments, however, might I point out that the title has the 'e' missing in 'Stonehenge'? There are a few other typos, which you might want to check out if you would like to fix them. Linda :-)
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Wonderfully done!! Been in places like that myself... You captured the feel excellently!!
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what an awesome feeling it must be to stand encircled by ancient mysteries on a stormy night...i can hear the thunder rolling... you have brought me a true vision of your experience
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Wow!
True beauty
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Yes .. that feeling of being someplace, someplace you've known all your life, through stories .. it is mesmerizing, magical. Nice poem .. very nice poem ..
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Mmmm Yep, captured the majesty..
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