Though most days I work ardently
so others can be fun,
I'm always glad there's you with me
'cause honey, you're the one.
The one who waltzes in this place
that only can be bound
by a heart that fills the space
no one has ever found.
No other taps their feet along
life's long and winding way
or sings to me a snappy song
throughout my silent day.
Though unlike Ginger Rogers
along side Fred Astaire,
We'll be the swifter dodgers
And make a better pair.
So, twitch that nose that makes me smile-
let's do the hoochie-coo,
my love will dance an extra mile,
as long as it's with you!
Author notes
A moosh with a different squoosh..lol.
Written January 8th, 2004
A contest entry
- the lyrics of love by persephone grey.
300 points, ended July 4, 2005, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ecstasy of Movement by MortalPhoenix.
700 points, ended July 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tap Shoes and Tutus (prewrites welcome) by Danna Hobart.
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This made me smile.
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This has a very antique feel to it, in a good way. A sweet love poem that relies on memory rather than sappy images.
Well penned.
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This is such a sweet poem, and it is beautifully written. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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Thank you for you comment. You are an amazing writer. This poem was just awesome.
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My dear, did you realize you posted a poem-reply to me (which was so special and sweet of you!!
) but also some poems by others? Just wanted you to know in the event it was a whoops.
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WOW, this is simply wonderful. I love how everything just flows together so wonderfuly. Just WOW... I love the lines:
Though we're no Ginger Rogers
along side Fred Astaire,
We'll be the swifter dodgers
And make a better pair.
Most people my age haven't the slitest clue as to who they are. Sad huh? I think so. But I truly do think that this is a wonderful peice written with much thought and planning. Fantastic job. Thank you so much for sharing your words and experiences with all of us here. -
I love this poem, it's really adorable, my favorite part is "So, twitch that nose that makes me smile- let's do the hoochie-coo, my love will dance an extra mile, as long as it's with you!"
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ahh, danceing like fred astair. wouldna that be sweet?
well ye did well here to no use the regular words asi\ociated wi' love. ye get a lovely picture across that a love strond and real....
i am impressed wi' ye truly
arden
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I especially liked the last two lines of the middle stanza, more than imagery, a feeling in your gut! Very nice and I hope it does you well in the contest
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sweet
Awwwwwwww....this is sweet and keeps a rhythm well. Thanks for commenting on my poem and good luck in the contest! -
What a cute little poem! Reads as smooth as a bebe's bottom.. haha!
Very song-like, I agree.
Good luck!
xoxo forevermore -
So very delightful to read!!
Indeed,
such lovely images of both of you
flashed across these skies
doing the hoochie-coo!
Good luck!
ahh, WHAT AM I SAYING HERE!!!!
YOU GOT IT GIRL!!!!
Take Care
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Almost sounds like a song as I read it. Left me with one of those innocent little smiles. I need more of these smiles. One little motion so unique to someone we love, can be everything, especially when they are gone and we see someone else make a similar motion. Don't mean to go sad on you. Peace & Love. ET
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Lovely poem Cookie, sweet filled with happiness, nicely done to Uncle Tony if thats who its for Hugs and love, Sherry
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Ahhh.. That is so sweet. You're a blessed woman.
Absinthe -
ADORABLE! Absolutely! I loved this, Ginger Rogers! LOL LOL LOL An' ole Fred Astaire? Give 'im a hug for me, will you?
Hope you dance your way up to first place, my dear.
Love,
Myra
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I LOVE this! It is so darn sappy and sweet it just made me smile and say "Awwwwwwwwwwww!" It's wonderful to read a poem written by someone so obviously happy and in love, you have inspired me to not give up just quite yet......I want the hoochie-coo, too! lol Much love and many hugs to you and the best of luck in the contest!
~Janet~
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