The hand that slips away is hesitant,
my heartbeat runs along the veins,
I am your humble supplicant,
you're holding all the reigns.
Trust is hardest when love is forbidden,
averted, my eyes are virginal,
the passion between us cannot be hidden,
a revival of love original.
Together our bodies merge in a tempest,
we swirl in the sheets a nebula,
mutually seeking locations to nest,
to drink in our love's potent formula.
Author notes
1. Write a love poem.... any kind of love.. motherly love.. romantic love.. sisterly love.. anything (more likely to win trophy if you write something really original)
A contest entry
- Options, Options, Options and PW allowed! by PonyPride.
950 points, ended September 10, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Line 4 is unwittingly very amusing indeed. And the rhyming scheme, being bizarre, is also quite funny. Jolly well done, indeed, I am tempted to say. But I shall resist.
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Resisting temptations strengthens one character!
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very good word usage and such a great picture you've painted with your words/emotions
this is lovely
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Thank you for your comment! Aloha!
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How Original!
Wow! This is THE most original love poem I have ever read! Congrats! Hear more killer poems set to original music about the planet at www.nakedadam.net
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