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Forbidden Fruits

Eyes burning a path down my body from afar,
as want begins to build within
distance closes with each intake of breath,
as thoughts of you dwell on more than friend

Finger tips ignite along my skin
kisses teasingly whisper their presence to me,
as your lips burn a trail along my throat,
while passions flair uncontrollably

Rendering you my throat in silent submission
offering myself to you in more ways than one,
you pull away captured by thought
relinquishing the most forbidden of fruits

Author notes

My inspiration for this poem was one of my best friends, ben, and the "more than friend" part means a whole heck of a lot more. lol This poem I wrote late at night, and was in a hurry so I apologize if there are any mistakes concerning the wording. lol please let me know what you think of it. suggestions or criticism are both wanted.

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  • machine
    1 day ago
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    Awsomeness

    I know how that goes. I have had a few of those friends that I wanted more of.lol Well written and the wording is just awsome fore the poem you can feel and imagine it. Great write.


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 28, 2009

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    A lush, passionate poem that is beautiful in it's a subtle desires. It shows the desires we all have but in poetic words that not all of is have mastered.

  • Hanah
    October 21, 2008

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    I think the title is great.The poem itself is well written and flows well .The imagery is clear and this piece can surely transmit emotions.


  • Yorkshire Lass
    August 2, 2008

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    Fruity!

    The title is very well choosen for this poem, the mixtue of words made it work really well and the references of fire work well with this theme of love


  • wave picture frame
    July 24, 2008

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    there is so much amazing imagery going on here! i love your use of fire and words such as flair when referring to passion. it's a nice length too. this is hot! thanks, keep writing friend -Jamie

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